I need opinions on ze main plot nao~

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I need opinions on ze main plot nao~

Post by MousenHeath on Fri Oct 15, 2010 2:03 am

So yeah, go read it and tell me what you think. Good/bad? How's it going so far? Would you like find out what happens? Has the story grabbed you? What do we think of our little weed-smoking Balinese-mask-wearing rat? What do we think of our damn gorgeous tobacco-smoking boot-wearing mouse?

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Down the winding path he trod,
Kilholmes in his wake.
For the silvy estolhod,
And the hoolesnake.
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Post by Rayquaza7996 on Fri Oct 15, 2010 2:19 am

I think it needs more candy. And raptors bursting through windows. And t-rexs wearing silly hats and dancing. And SPARKULPONIES. And Whitemane. And Cowbell.

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It's great xD

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Empty house far away
lost in lonely space
you know you felt the same

From the shallows of love
to the depths of your scars
you know you want to change

In the rafters of fate
fixed and spinning late
there is a certain fear

Even light with control
lights outside our homes
wait for every tear

So exit the fall and now it's over
you're letting it fall before your heart
so exit the fall and now it's over
you're letting it fall before your heart

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Post by MousenHeath on Fri Oct 15, 2010 2:21 am

XD Thanks. -gigglesnorts-

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Kilholmes in his wake.
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And the hoolesnake.
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